“You riding alone?”
Nicki looked along the line to the man towering over the ride attendant.
“Indeed” he replied.
She watched as he folded himself into the carriage, his movement like liquid. The ghoulish siren wailed and the man was carried inside.
“Weird”
“What?” Annie asked, beside her.
“Oh nothing”
More carriages departed before she and Annie were squeezed together in their own. They trundled forward as a shout rang out,
“Hey, who let an empty carriage go in? The queue is massive!”
Nicki span around knowing. No one did.
“Wait. No wait!” She cried.
The siren cried louder and the doors closed.
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PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll
I wrote this as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. The idea is to write a short story (just 100 words) based on the photo prompt provided.
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Thanks for reading x
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pssst…. I wrote another one. In fact, I wrote this first – on Wednesday – and rejected it. I’ve just come across it and rather than delete it I’ll just leave it here…
The Fairy-Go-Round
Katie carefully lifted the miniature roundabout out of the final box.
“It’s here” she breathed.
Placing it gently on a table in the middle of the attic, she grasped its centre and twisted. A storm of dust danced into the sunlight.
“I knew Mum wouldn’t have thrown it away. She knew I loved it”
“We loved it” Megan corrected her.
“No, you…” She let it go. “Go on then… you can wind it” she offered Megan.
The music tinkled its tune.
“Like crystal bells in the hands of fairies” they repeated in unison and smiled.
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Loved the “his movement was like liquid.” You’ve set up a spooky scenario and you’ve left me feeling as though I am hanging over the cliff. Need more.
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Gave me goosebumps
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I’m trying to decide which one I like best!
They were both wonderful!
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Both these stories are amazing! The first one was chilling and I’d love to find out what happens next! And the second one was just beautiful. Both well written as always and gorgeous imagery; ‘A storm of dust danced into the sunlight.’ Love it x
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I preferred your second attempt – it was deliciously spooky. Well done.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Yeah me too 😃
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Dear Anna,
Hard to choose between the two. Both are well done.
Loved the description of the man folding himself into the car.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I like the first story, but the second one was better, for me at least, there was life in it.
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Oh wow, something spooky and chilling going on!
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Nice and spooky that first one.
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I like the first one, very spooky. The second one is adorable though. If I had to pick, I’d pick the first one too, because I love a good ghost story. Thanks for the 2-for-1!
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